Market Day

WALT:write an interesting and detailed recount

Last friday was market day, full of buying and selling.The market day was really fun and amazing.I bought chips, ice blocks and yummy cupcakes, Wouldn’t you? that was only half the fun. Would you want to buy good brownies, Hot chips, Ice blocks or yummy cupcakes.Read on and find out more.

There is trade and enterprise groups and guess what group i’m in, i’m in Jewel’s and accessories., There is other groups like toys,kitchen, custom stationery,music,homeware but Jewel’s and accessories was what I wanted to be in .What me and my business group made was loom bands,but these loom bands were really cool and different. At market day we are able to sell the products that we made.  We had made our product for over 7 weeks until the market came on Friday.

The whole Team 4 were split up into their enterprise groups. We started moving tables after our school assembly because straight after morning tea we were going to have the market.The Jewels and accessories group was setting up in Mrs Jacobson's classroom.Kitchen had to set up outside.There were people like visitors that came to our market they didn’t really know how to use the PTS and Piceces.

I bought a lot of items from the kitchen like brownies, Ice blocks and also cupcake. Kids got the chance to talk to their partners about who’s buying and who’s selling, Well there were 4 people in my group which was Yvonne, Revival, Vinolia and me. We all agreed that Yvonne and Revival were selling first and Me and Vinolia were buying first, that went all well.

Well I made some product that a lot of people have ordered and also my partner too.We both made a lot of money.We have been waiting for this day because we worked hard making loom bands and key rings.Well we sold a lot of stuff that we have made.  

Well the market day was super awesome because I had a lot of fun buying and selling stuff.I would love to have another market day again.The one I liked the most was kitchen because they had really really good, delicious and tasty brownies,Ice blocks and also cupcakes.Me and My group made over 70pts and 70pieces.HOPE YOU ENJOY MY STORY....

Write for my reader	I've tried to think about my reader	My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.	My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.	My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
Purpose	I tried to meet the purpose	My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose	The message is clear in some parts of the recount.	My text fully meets the purpose. The message is clear all through the recount.
Introduction	My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.	My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.	My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.	My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics	My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.	I have tried to follow my plan. Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.	My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea. I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.	My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.

Write for my reader	I've tried to think about my reader	My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.	My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.	My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
Purpose	I tried to meet the purpose	My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose	The message is clear in some parts of the recount.	My text fully meets the purpose. The message is clear all through the recount.
Introduction	My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.	My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.	My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.	My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics	My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.	I have tried to follow my plan. Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.	My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea. I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.	My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.

I Have learned how to make detailed recounts and learned how to make them interesting for the reader to keep on reading on, I also got help from my friends and they also helped me from my punctuation. The task was asking me to make my story interesting and put more details in it.